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Triptych Sixes by silvernium Triptych Sixes by silvernium
Poetry written to a piece of triptych art [link] by ~monguz for #transliterations prompt #2 - the idea here being that with the three written verses you could arrange them in any order - six possible combinations.

My "artwork" (haha) here is FAR from perfect, but I'm a poet not an artist - I needed some visual representation to separate the six sets. It was all I could come up with tonight with materials on hand.

They are best read as three separate verses, but one can also read them 1st sentence across all three, 2nd sentence and so forth. It is something I have wanted to try for a while and #transliterations provided the perfect prompt (lovely picture too).

Apologies for the blurry results - I used the work scanner.

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Interpretation of the original artwork [link] Although done in three pieces, I felt that each piece was divided in two, hence that gave me some idea for reading it six ways. I felt there were two people walking? dreaming? conversing?, maybe through art?, images?, ideas?, dreams?, and that each triptych piece felt reflected within itself. It is a very abstract surreal piece, and so my words are also abstract. My words were written in about 5mins, no edits (always interesting to write this way).

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Example of two ways the 1st triptych can be read:

either:

somewhere in the haze
you conceptualised
was it a dream
a memory
re-embered

we walked together
against the backdrop
of frames
underneath you saw
a camera view

did you capture the moment
when we realised
everything is
pieces of now
and then ..



or

somewhere in the haze -- we walked together -- did you capture the moment

you conceptualised -- against the backdrop -- when we realised

was it a dream -- of frames -- everything is

a memory -- underneath you saw -- pieces of now

re-embered -- a camera view -- and then ..
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Given 2012-10-17
Triptych Sixes by *silvernium ( Featured by BeccaJS )
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Incross Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012   Digital Artist
I almost cried :'D this is beautiful-- the combinations and possibilities form various abstract images and feelings, at least in my head.
Great job :D
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and experienced the combinations in the way they are intended :)
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
Infinite possibilities for the form here. Astounding!
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Try it out if you want to!
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Sargon-the-first Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me a lot of a pantoum, which are really fun to make, too. ; w;

But it's utterly amazing and bluh, even without it resembling my favorite poem structure.
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silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh pantoum's are fun, come up with a few lines, and then they write themselves don't they ;)
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Sargon-the-first Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed. ; w;
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :heart:
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on your DD :)
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome :)
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
:la: Congrats on the daily deviation!
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012
:huggle: You're welcome!
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nat0ruh Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nice!! :D
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silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you enjoyed :)
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ninetozero Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Filmographer
Very nice.
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silvernium Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks !
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orphicfiddler Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
Oh, that was an awesome way to do the triptych. Wish I'd thought of it . . . :)
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:iconsilvernium:
silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It was a fun composition :)
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AegisAvantGarde Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Professional Artist
wow very nice concept
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silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. I've had the idea about triptych poetry for a while, and I've played with a similar thing with haiku, but the group prompt for which this was done got me motivated, especially as I found it on the evening the prompt ended. Yay for dA motivation.
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zebrazebrazebra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Professional Writer
This. Is. Incredible. I only have one request: can you move it into visual poetry? That gallery needs all the help it can get.

I kind of see what Que is seeing about the layout, but I like that it's left up to the reader to decide how to read it--you haven't forced us in any direction. The only problem with that is that people will inevitably choose the obvious path. The installation idea, allowing people to rearrange the sections themselves...now that's fascinating. You could almost do that with some Flash or HTML5, kind of like a webpage jigsaw. You should give it a try!
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silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I have moved it :)

Yea - the layout sucks, I needed a way to quickly put the verses together, and rearrange them to make sure they actually work. I was at work and all I could do was grab some colour paper and the work scanner. So thing of this as a conception piece, stage one. Even this poem isn't terribly important - it is the rearrangement idea.

I've had a go on a visual poetry site where you pick all the words and move them around, it can / could be done (I'm not a programmer).

Try this idea:

Firstly the concept is a fourth dimensional cube, a tesseract, which has 48 faces.

Tesseract: [link]

Tesseract poem: [link]

I don't know how much of this sort of thing is out there, but it is fun playing!
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zebrazebrazebra Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Professional Writer
Well, it's pretty damn shiny for a conception piece.

I think I know the piece you mean--and as for not being a programmer, you just have to find one to collaborate with. Or do what I do, and date one!

Is that your blog?
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silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No - it isn't my blog. I need to find a programmer and an artist and a musician and a photographer :D
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Professional Writer
Very well done, I must say. Your loose language really does give it a good feel, and the words move crisply and seem to say something without ever quite nailing it down. I never considered reading the lines across, but there are some interesting things in doing that as well. My main criticism of this would be that the piece itself doesn't really draw your eye to reading it that way just due to the layout. I don't know if there would be some way you could manage to change the perspective so we can see you wanted it read that way as well.

Anyway, very cool indeed. Almost makes me think of magnetic poetry. Really unique take. Thanks much for the submission!
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silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, I'm so glad the language does work, I guess it is supposed to lead your thoughts along in whatever direction they may take, just like the original artwork.

I don't like the visual representation I did, but I noticed the close date was the same night I was reading the prompt!

Ideally I'd put the three verses on three separate wall hangings, so that you could rearrange them for a different poem. As you mention, even three verses on magnets could prove an interesting result.

I would have loved to have done colours in red and white probably, to incorporate the feel of the original artwork - but anyway I really enjoyed experimenting with this, I have had the triptych concept for some time now, but had not done anything about it.

Reading some of the other quality submissions people have done for this prompt has been really inspiring.

Thanks very much for your comment.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Professional Writer
My pleasure! And yeah, the work we got for this prompt and our first was all really good stuff. It's been hard for me to keep up with commenting, but I always feel rewarded for the effort with all the variety we've had.
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silvernium Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I always like to think, when involved in a group art type project - of all the newly created written work that never would have existed had one not been involved -- so, pat yourself on the back, have a celebratory whiskey, or whatever you are into - this prompt was huge fun and I can't wait to see what is up next.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2011  Professional Writer
Absolutely. I'll drink to that.
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